Bound (Promise me)

[Dutch]

Bound

Solemnly
An unkind sky gazes down on me
All wells run dry/
Eventually
I raise the cup for good luck
Driplets are all that remain
Broken stains

Promise me
To guide my brazen ways from me
If i tell you why
Repeatedly
I gave you up at a cost
Rivers run away from me
To be drained

Freefallng,away from me
Temptres don't use your ways on me
You'll get your prey
Believe in me

Questionably
Your kind says you should flee
To your sign
Mistakenly
Making up the strangest plots
To remember why

So suddenly
I believe you tried to speak
In words you lost
Eternally
No love was left for us


Just an tough broken promise
Barely enough that we would miss
What it is
To be loved

Boundaries
So much stranger than our bodies
rushing into daylight
Intertwined
Just a shadow above the pond
Untill the dawn

Stay with me
I'll bring you dreams for free
If you'd only come closer
Don't put the blame on me
I can't live to bring you peace
In the wars you wage on me

Eerily
As woken up from a lonely dove
I still hear you whisper
Silently
Like the words you gave up
I love you bitter

Untill the end
I brought you love
Mistakenly taken for pure lust
You must understand
That i am a better man
And,no matter how i try
I can not help
To choose myself
O~over youuuuuu

Let the last line stutter on "over" and fade out on "youuuuuuu". Written and composed, it's ready for your friendly crits and i'll post a fully finished version when done.

[nicklz]

Oh, hot doggie! I want to hear it.

"I can't live to bring you peace
In the wars you wage on me"

Loved that part. This was a very emotional piece. Hook it up.

[jessluvsya]

Okay read this three times in the past few days and am finally ready to respond. As per usual, Mr Dutch lovessss him his wordplay, luckily so do I and therefore I found this quite entertaining. While there are many tantilizingly sensual and senseless (both at once) lines in here (and I don't mean senseless without meaning) the most important part is the end. The final line that says look, we had lots of fun, you done me wrong, you took me wrong, I've changed, and I can't choose you over myself. It's something that many people never do, even though they should. Being selfish is necessary sometimes, I myself am still trying to grasp onto that lovely concept. Anyways, great read as always, sheer brilliance loves

[SteveK]

Broken heart type of song.   More specifically, conflict between lust vs. love.  If she didn't love you she must be a whore?  Redundant use of "Me" rather than a sense of a self.  Sorry if I'm being too blunt.
Steve